Transitions and Cohesion Exercise

The Writing of Business

Transitions and Cohesion Exercise

The following section from the introduction of a proposal uses three standard types of sentence elements to establish cohesion and to guide readers through the text:

transitional words and phrases
repetition of key words
use of reference words (like this, these, those, that, and such)

Read the proposal section. Then underline the sentence elements that establish cohesion and number them according to their type.

Two schools were established. A seminary for 200 students was established in

1981 to train youngsters for priesthood in order to cater to the needs of the sacred

ministry throughout the entire Church. The Chanjale Appropriate Technology Center

(CATC) for 150 students was built adjacent to the seminary in order to share the

limited resources of the local church. The school trains young people appropriate

skills in environment, animal husbandry, carpentry, blacksmithing, masonry, health,

and sustainable agriculture. These kinds of skills prepare youngsters for future

self-employment. Upon graduation, these young people go to their villages to share

their skills with the villagers, assisting them to find the root causes of their poverty

and to find the possible solutions by using the natural resources available.

Both schools have been very successful. By June 15, 1996, the seminary will

be proud of producing 14 priests, 7 brothers, and other professionally trained

individuals such as teachers, doctors, and economists. CATC has had a great impact

on the rural population. Most of the villages now plant corn in a line, figure out

spacing, and use animal manure. This has doubled their output.

Members of one group of young women from the program, all from the same

rural region, have already met with their villages and devised a project to raise

chickens. Instead of people constructing their houses with mud, they use burnt bricks

and tiles. But perhaps most important as far as the center is concerned, is the idea of

agriforestry, a highly successful method of mixing reforestation with crop production.

Trees not only prevent soil erosion and attract rainfall, but they also provide fruits,

thereby contributing to a balanced diet for the villagers. Also, the center improved

fuel efficiency by 50% by using a charcoal stone with ceramic lining instead of the

traditional metal--"jiko." Everyone in the village is happy with this technology.

The strong response from the villagers has led the center to increase the

number of students from other villages. In 1988, both schools had a total of 225

students. Today we have 350 students and 550 villagers around the schools. The

increase in students has created an increased demand for water.

The two centers receive running water from a river seven miles away. This

project was sponsored by Miserior, an agency of the Catholic Church in Germany

in 1989. At present, the demand on the water supply has doubled and forced the

students to desert growing vegetables and fruits. The reforestation project is also

threatened.

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